I DO NOT WISH TO DIE

[pandora]

Hi All,

This is a revision of this poem. Hope it works better.

Marg


I DO NOT WISH TO DIE......
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I do not wish to die in Spring
when flowers bloom
and birds chirp.

Nor do I wish to go in Summer
when days are warm
and nights are soft.

Nor do I wish to die in Autumn
when leaves turn
and please the eye.

Winter is the time to go
with the sighing
of the trees,

a simple passing like the leaves
in blast of cold North wind.

Remember me when Spring comes round
when flowers bloom
and I'll return.


April 17, 2005
Marguerite K.A. Petersen

[Gerard Becker]

hope you don't go in winter either!
it has its own ethereal beauty!
you last rhyme contains a very metaphysical notion of life's wheel : a
deceased body in this life joins itself to a circle in which the
elements become reconstituted-not sure u meant that but... that is what
heard and I the personally believe!
Verrrry evocative language througout. Hope the meloncholia is fleeting
and that u find joy in all seasons!
the seeker

OUR LIVES ARE NOT DETERMINED BY WHAT HAPPENS TO US, BUT HOW WE REACT TO
WHAT HAPPENS.; NOT BY WHAT WHAT LIFE BRINGS TO US, BUT BY THE ATTITUDE
WE BRING TO LIFE!

[pandora]

Post by Gerard Becker
hope you don't go in winter either!
it has its own ethereal beauty!

Indeed, it does.

Post by Gerard Becker
you last rhyme contains a very metaphysical notion of life's wheel : a
deceased body in this life joins itself to a circle in which the
elements become reconstituted-not sure u meant that but... that is what
heard and I the personally believe!

I'm glad that came through. I believe it as well.

Post by Gerard Becker
Verrrry evocative language througout. Hope the meloncholia is fleeting
and that u find joy in all seasons!
the seeker

Thanks for your kind comments. I wasn't really feeling melancholy when I
wrote this. I was just thinking about all the seasons of the year and what
joy I find in them. I'd hate to miss a one of them, but, of course, sooner
or later, I'll have to.

Marg

Post by Gerard Becker
OUR LIVES ARE NOT DETERMINED BY WHAT HAPPENS TO US, BUT HOW WE REACT TO
WHAT HAPPENS.; NOT BY WHAT WHAT LIFE BRINGS TO US, BUT BY THE ATTITUDE
WE BRING TO LIFE!

[Gerard Becker]

perhaps you and I shall forever avoid elysium
and fluorish in the land of the living! though I have heard the other
place is bathed in the sunlight of eternal health and happiness where
a bard can write for eternity! perhaps death is the beginning of another
journey-that is for another poem....hummmmmm? (lol)
inciteful writing
jer

ATTITUDE DETERMINES ALTITUDE

[pandora]

Post by Gerard Becker
perhaps you and I shall forever avoid elysium
and fluorish in the land of the living! though I have heard the other
place is bathed in the sunlight of eternal health and happiness where
a bard can write for eternity! perhaps death is the beginning of another
journey-that is for another poem....hummmmmm? (lol)
inciteful writing
jer

Thanks for your comments. Yeah, it would be nice if we get to continue
writing forever and continuing the journey would be wonderful, IMO.

Marg

Post by Gerard Becker
ATTITUDE DETERMINES ALTITUDE

[l***@aol.com]

Hi Marg...

How have you been? I stumbled on this newsgroup in search of better
things. Been a long time since I graced rec.arts.poems...and it looks
the same...

Good to see you.
Angel

[pandora]

Post by l***@aol.com
Hi Marg...
How have you been? I stumbled on this newsgroup in search of better
things. Been a long time since I graced rec.arts.poems...and it looks
the same...

Angel! Good to see/hear from you as well. It's been a long time.
I'm good. Still writing and working on my poetry. Hope that you are too.

Post by l***@aol.com
Good to see you.
Angel

Ditto!

Marg

[Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor]

Now THIS reads like poetry!
Please forgive me, but I'm going to re-shape your lines just a tad, as an
experiment...
--
Dick Silk -- The Computer Tutor
http://personalpages.tds.net/~rcsilk

Perhaps you and I shall

forever avoid elysium

And fluorish in the land of the living!
Though I have heard the other place is

bathed in the sunlight of eternal
health and happiness where

A bard can write for eternity!
Perhaps death is the beginning of

another journey--

that is for another poem....hummmmmm? (lol)

[Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor]

I personally HATE winter funerals. And if you do die in the winter, should
we bury this text along with you?
(Good pun at the end, by the way!) :-) As a serious comment, you could
easily turn this into a standard Haiku, and it would take on a much stronger
existence.

Post by pandora
Hi All,
This is a revision of this poem. Hope it works better.
Marg
I DO NOT WISH TO DIE......
--------------------------------------
I do not wish to die in Spring
when flowers bloom
and birds chirp.
Nor do I wish to go in Summer
when days are warm
and nights are soft.
Nor do I wish to die in Autumn
when leaves turn
and please the eye.
Winter is the time to go
with the sighing
of the trees,
a simple passing like the leaves
in blast of cold North wind.
Remember me when Spring comes round
when flowers bloom
and I'll return.
April 17, 2005
Marguerite K.A. Petersen
--
"It is better to have loved a short person than never to have loved a tall."

...

[pandora]

Post by Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor
I personally HATE winter funerals. And if you do die in the winter, should
we bury this text along with you?

I would prefer if it were read at my funeral. I'm sure I can find someone
who would do so. I too hate winter funerals but at least, given the
weather, they are appropriate. Much worse, IMO, is a June funeral. It just
ain't fitting, ya know?

Post by Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor
(Good pun at the end, by the way!) :-)

Thanks!

As a serious comment, you could

Post by Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor
easily turn this into a standard Haiku, and it would take on a much stronger
existence.

I may do that. I'm having some trouble with this one. It's had several
incarnations and this is only the latest one. It still doesn't seem *right*
to me. Perhaps a haiku would be better. I don't know. I'll work on it.

Post by Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor

Post by pandora
Hi All,
This is a revision of this poem. Hope it works better.
Marg
I DO NOT WISH TO DIE......
--------------------------------------
I do not wish to die in Spring
when flowers bloom
and birds chirp.
Nor do I wish to go in Summer
when days are warm
and nights are soft.
Nor do I wish to die in Autumn
when leaves turn
and please the eye.
Winter is the time to go
with the sighing
of the trees,
a simple passing like the leaves
in blast of cold North wind.
Remember me when Spring comes round
when flowers bloom
and I'll return.
April 17, 2005
Marguerite K.A. Petersen
--
"It is better to have loved a short person than never to have loved a tall."

...

[Dick Silk - The Computer Tutor]

Post by pandora

As a serious comment, you could easily turn this into a standard Haiku,
and it would take on a much stronger existence.

I may do that. I'm having some trouble with this one. It's had several
incarnations and this is only the latest one. It still doesn't seem *right*
to me. Perhaps a haiku would be better. I don't know. I'll work on it.

It's *ALMOST* in haiku format already. If you re-fashion it, I'd be
genuinely interested in reading it at that time.

Post by pandora

Post by pandora
I DO NOT WISH TO DIE......
--------------------------------------
I do not wish to die in Spring
when flowers bloom
and birds chirp.
Nor do I wish to go in Summer
when days are warm
and nights are soft.
Nor do I wish to die in Autumn
when leaves turn
and please the eye.
Winter is the time to go
with the sighing
of the trees,
a simple passing like the leaves
in blast of cold North wind.
Remember me when Spring comes round
when flowers bloom
and I'll return.
April 17, 2005
Marguerite K.A. Petersen

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